Patricia Wellingham-Jones

POETRY FITS MY BODY

The poems first bubbled forth in 1992 when I was trying physical therapy to avoid surgery on a deteriorating cervical spine. For more than a decade I'd been doing research and writing scientific papers and articles on health and handwriting, then added to the mix garden writing and photography.

Surgery brought a sudden stop to bending over a microscope and camera lens. I did not wake up a quadriplegic (a real possibility), was thrilled to wiggle fingers and toes as I came out of anesthesia, and demanded pen and paper. The neurosurgeon had forewarned the staff and, amused, they provided these tools. A year later he and I co-authored a paper published in Perceptual and Motor Skills,1 complete with MRI pictures of my neck, on the effect of cervical spine surgery on handwriting, so that was an interesting use of a bad situation. Mostly though, in this time of learning to live left-handed and coping with a new kind of chronic pain (along with lower spine surgical aftermaths), the poems rumbled in my head.

I kept scribbling poems, got asked for occasional articles or essays. Short stories spilled forth, even got published. Oh, what joy! I discovered I loved writing the short forms, the free forms, the mini stories that turned up on the page. Poetry fit my body. I couldn't write for long stretches, nor could I again consider the detailed, labor-intensive projects giving me data for scientific articles. Further, I'd fallen into a new cycle in my life, and didn't want to.

This cycle also taught me about the way I write. For instance, the stories and articles come straight from brain to fingers to keyboard to monitor screen. No problem. Boom, it's up there. The poems, though, insist on a different path. They come when they want (it's been a dry several months, but more on that later), in the form they want, and they need finger on pen, ink to paper to feel right. The physical, textural contact of words and paper seems essential. I'm thankful that, as years passed, I regained most use of my right hand so I can read my handwriting again. The poems would have had a mad scramble otherwise.

Early on, I decided I wrote for my own pleasure. I didn't have a goal or purpose or message, I was simply trying to catch in a succinct way events that happened around me. The narrative style came naturally and life was rich with interesting small moments. I had no training in writing, so I attended conferences and workshops when I could, learned a lot, threw much away.

By the time cancer paid its horrible call, at least I was ready, poem-wise. I wrote my way through that process and found, as many do, that the writing helped the healing. Not curing of the body, but healing of the spirit. My husband and a friend pushed me to collect some of those poems and that became the chapbook, Don't Turn Away: Poems about breast cancer2. A few years ago I helped set up and now lead a healing writing group at our local cancer center.3, 4

Time passed and my dear husband Roy entered the last phases of his life. Again, I wrote my way through, catching on paper the things that were happening. This resulted in End-Cycle: Poems about caregiving.5

The poems in End-Cycle were written at random as Roy and I progressed through the last stages of his life, including the development of dementia caused by numerous strokes. I knew from my experience with cancer there would be a book about caregiving someday and I hoped it might touch people as Don't Turn Away has. After all, caregiving has always been with us and, with our increasing aging population, will become even more necessary.

When the call for Palabra Productions chapbook contest came, I thought, "Why not?" and bundled up a set of poems just under the deadline. To my surprise, that collection won. This proved a mixed blessing, as it wasn't what I might have chosen for the complete book at a later date. Publication snags dragged out for months until I gave up and took over myself. By then Roy had died; his process was complete. And I had poems illustrating the whole, not just the first three-quarters of our journey together.

I assembled this chapbook the way I've done all the others. One day I sat on the living room floor with all my poems on caregiving in a stack. I sorted them by logical sequence and chronology into piles, then chose the best of each lot for the book. I shifted, revised, rethought for several days until the arrangement felt right. I knew I needed a poem to show the start of his decline, so that's the one I'm using here to show how I work in revision. I belong to a critique group, Skyway Poets, and those women gave valuable feedback on the poems.

First draft:

Fall

He crouched in that competent [keep stanza just as it is]
fold of the body I've watched
for thirty years as he fixed
broken planters, pipes dripping rust,
bicycle wheels gone askew.

As he hammered nails [remove ‘as', it weakens the thought, isn't a complete sentence; keep stanza]
to hold up a house,
figured angles to make metal fit,
planted seedlings, cradled
an armful of kittens.

Today, as he tried to rise [change poem to present tense here]
from his crouch, his legs trembled.
His foot caught on a damp [change ‘caught' to more pictorial ‘slips']
patch of earth and he spilled
like an overturned flowerpot. [refused to use ‘turtle on back' cliché]

On his back, foundered, [use image instead of abstract ‘foundered']
he called my name twenty times [change ‘twenty times or more' to ‘over and over', sounds more helpless]
or more. I, just a wall away,
heard only the printer
spewing my words. ['spewing' distasteful, use 'rattling' for true sound of it, plus better image]

When the last page landed
on the tray, I heard a faint croak [change 'heard' to more active 'catch']
from the porch, put it to ravens,
then heard it again. ['heard' is repeated but is not important enough for that]
Hours later we sit in a warm-lit room, [drop down to next stanza, though it changes the number of lines per stanza; needs to go with final lines]

sip drinks, while our trembles [bring up 'ebb' and delete too-wordy next line]
slowly ebb from tight-wound bodies. [not needed, keep it succinct]
Thankful for no broken bones, we regard
with somber eyes, the turned path [change 'somber' eyes to more powerful image, give 'turned path' the importance it deserves on the next line]
littered with jagged stones beneath our feet. [over-wrote this line, poem ended before, with the brief but important addition]

Final draft:

Fall

He crouched in that competent
fold of the body I've watched
for thirty years as he fixed
broken planters, pipes dripping rust,
bicycle wheels gone askew.

He hammered nails
to hold up a house,
figured angles to make metal fit,
planted seedlings, cradled
an armful of kittens.

Today, as he tries to rise
from his crouch, his legs tremble.
His foot slips on a damp
patch of earth and he spills
like an overturned flowerpot.

On his back, arms flailing,
he calls my name over and over.
I, just a wall away,
hear only the printer
rattling out words.

When the last page lands
on the tray, I catch a faint croak
from the porch, put it to ravens,
then hear the sound again.

Hours later we sit in a warm-lit room,
sip drinks, while our trembles ebb.
Thankful for no broken bones, we regard—
with eyes that don't want to see—
the turned path, the days ahead.

Collection complete, I sent it to a couple of poet friends for their input. They made a few suggestions, including omitting one poem which I've since regretted (pointing out that sometimes we need to ignore everybody else and just do what feels right to us, no matter what). Because it's a favorite of mine, and shows that special fleeting time (the final rally, the hospice nurse calls it) at the end of Roy's life, I enclose it here. It truly was a 'gift poem', needing very little tinkering.

Maybe the Last Time

Now that the house has settled down again
Roy and I have had conversations.
Yes, he's demented
and doesn't know my name,
but these are heart-talks
not mind-talks
and we are both very clear
on what we are saying.
I sit on the floor by his wheelchair,
his fingers stroke my hand,
we both know his days
are now counted in hours.

Published in The League of Laboring Poets, 2007

I was, and am, surprised to find myself regarded as a writer in the disability literature arena, as that has never been my aim. I write solely for myself. I'm honored that the work is sometimes useful and delighted when it gets published, but am bemused to find myself here, even though my body does qualify, as caregiver for someone with dementia does, too.

Last year I dropped into yet another new cycle, literally. This capable woman who can do anything (oh, the lies we tell ourselves) was up on a ladder fixing a broken eave - and fell off. Wrecked my knee, had another bout of physical therapy and, so far, have avoided surgery. Desire fell off that ladder with me. For months I barely wrote except for the cancer center writing group. I developed polymyalgia rheumatica, further eroding energy and desire. Then poet friend, Stephani Schaefer, and I started getting together for free writes and the poems ambled back again. They're different now, I'm writing some strange things as a result of prompts, and it's a thrill seeing what this brain is still able to produce. Mostly I'm still a storyteller in verse, but many of today's poems explore places I've never been before. That's OK with me, anywhere the words take me makes an interesting ride.

Below is an example of the new direction recent poems are taking, results of trigger phrases that leap off the pages of assorted poetry books and journals. Steph and I listen to the phrase, write for three to five minutes, read our scribbles, then do it again. At the end of an hour and a half and one large pot of tea, we surface and blink in surprise at the 10 to 15 poems caught in our notebooks. Some are worth keeping, some not, and we feel good.

First draft:

The Question

The question dances on the surface
all spindly legs and flappy hands
It distracts the listener
keeps the sea line unruffled
level and still
Such lies skip
around the edges
like the water spider's delicate touch [change 'like' to 'with' to avoid simile, make the experience real; get rid of ‘delicate' - as my critique friends said, to a water spider it was his usual heavy tread on the surface, thus dissonant]
Balance on the thin membrane
stretched over the depths
Wait   wait
for the sudden shift in tone
the question no longer hidden
that slashes deep [they like the way the poem suddenly dives deep, which I hadn't planned, it just came out that way; bless the subconscious!]

Final draft:

The Question

The question dances on the surface
all spindly legs and flappy hands
It distracts the listener
keeps the sea line unruffled
level and still
Such lies skip
around the edges
with the water spider's touch
Balance on the thin membrane
stretched over the depths
Wait    wait for the sudden shift in tone
the question no longer hidden
that slashes deep

Sheila Black says in her recent essay "… within the experience of a particular disability insights of unique value often emerge."6 I agree, and reflect on the unexpected gift these disabilities confer. That forced step back from the busy life occurring with each new failure of the body takes me deeper inside, allows more time for mulling, helps me get priorities straight. I'm thankful for this, once I get over the rebellion and anger. My life feels infinitely richer than it did before.

Notes:
    1 Wellingham-Jones, Patricia & Jeffrey M. Lobosky. Surgical Spine Surgery and Handwriting: A Case Report. Perceptual and Motor Skills, 1993, 77,1043-1051.
    2 For Michael Northen's review of Don't Turn Away: Poems about breast cancer, see the disability literature blog, http://dispoet.blogspot.com/, March 12, 2005.
    3 Enloe Cancer Center http://www.enloe.org/guide_to_services/cancer_center.asp .
    4 For a P.W.J. interview on healing writing with R.D. Armstrong, see Lummox Journal, 2007, http://www.lummoxpress.com/journal/j003/wellingham-jones.php .
    5 For Michael Northen's review of End-Cycle: Poems about caregiving, see Wordgathering, June 2007, Vol.1, Issue 2,
         http://www.wordgathering.com/past_issues/issue2/review/wellingham-jones2.html .
    6 Sheila Black. On the Teaching of Disability Literature. Wordgathering , December 2008, Vol.2, Issue 4, http://www.wordgathering.com/issue8/essays/black.html .

 

Patricia Wellingham-Jones, PhD, RN, has written Don't Turn Away: Poems About Breast Cancer and End-Cycle: Poems About Caregiving, among others. Her work is published in numerous anthologies, journals and Internet magazines. A cancer survivor, she also lives with neurological dysfunction in arms and hands (as well as chronic pain). She has a longtime interest in 'healing writing' and the benefits people gain from writing and reading their work together.